Get a grown up to read through your story from yesterday, or read my comments if you sent it to me, and try and edit and improve your writing.
Add in some adjectives, (expanded noun phrases), and some subordinate clauses. Check your punctuation, capital letters etc.
Challenge: If you have included speech, then make sure that you have put speech marks, a piece of punctuation at the end inside the speech marks, always start it with a capital letter, and when a new speaker starts talking, it must be on a new line!!
Please send them to me to read.